Date: 06/16/2012 7:43 AM Title: From Afar
This is what I call, satisfaction, overall.
I LOVE IT!!! :D :D :D Love the childhood beginning, closing the gap, touching yet not touched. Then they do, and the meld. And afterwards, they meet again on terran soil. Wow, this is, really really nice. It's like a wave patterned cloud spread across the sunset skies. And we get to see the whole thing! Not really everything everything but, this amount, is really good. Just right.
You should right more, that's what I think at least. Even with english not being your 1st language, I'd say you have a better grasp on it than other english-speaking people. And I look forward to the time you attempt a longer piece. ;) All the best with whatever you have planned. You've got potential for plot, give it a shot yeah?
Date: 03/10/2011 10:05 AM Title: Closing the Gaps
Devious Amanda, her affection and sensual allure diverts for a time. It is of no small matter, censure will not separate them. I am so very glad.
The author's style is a kin to a picture. You get impressions that tell the tale. I enjoyed that in the first chapter and the more direct mode in this second chapter as well.
Date: 03/10/2011 9:56 AM Title: Closing the Gaps
It is emotional responses flittering through the mind? The words feel like that in the beginning, becoming coherent toward the end. So much perception going unoticed by the mature ones. Time and distance do not negate.