Date: 03/13/2015 4:15 AM Title: Chapter 1
Perfect sketch of THAT moment when everything became so painful in the life of the two of them. You manage to put into it the depth of Jim's hurt and confusion, his feeling of being put just outside reality, caught up in his pain and his longing. He takes a step towards his future, but he will stay like that - divided, with his heart and his emotional focus elsewhere - until they are together again.
Most beautiful, thanks for sharing.
I'm glad you liked it. It's hard to imagine Jim complete without Spock or the Enterprise, isn't it?
Thank you for reviewing :)
Date: 03/13/2015 2:18 AM Title: Chapter 1
Oh, and I almost forgot, you chose an excellent title. I confess I had to look up the word. I gather it means the farthest point of the orbit of two binary stars. Perfect for Kirk and Spock and the Gol interlude (and I like that it suggests they will get back together, but then we know that they will).
I'm so glad you enjoyed it! I'm sure there an unlimited number of possibilities for the two of them going to Gol/Earth, but I refuse to believe the two aren't related (and clearly SOMETHING personal happened I mean really). And also if we're 'confessing' things I confess that I looked up the word apastron in a list of astronomical terms because I couldn't think of a title, so don't feel bad about that :P
Thanks for reviewing :)
Date: 03/13/2015 2:16 AM Title: Chapter 1
This is FANTASTIC! Truly excellent writing -- spare, economical, yet evoking the essential truth of both men's feelings. The counterpoint between Kirk's memories and the rough, banal surroundings of the bar where he tries to anesthetize himself is taut, dramatic and conveys so much in so few words. The characterization is perfect, and the vignette is utterly believable as an explanation of why Spock went to Gol.
This is a superb example of "less is more." I know I will be haunted by this vignette for some time to come.