Date: 05/11/2010 8:26 PM Title: Chapter 3
I thought you meant choked the first time, but now I see you meant shocked. Do a Find and Replace, you did this at least twice. Just remember we read ch as tch. Chicken. Chechnya. Etc.
enjoying the story so far... Kirk is really going through some gut-churning changes.
Date: 05/11/2010 7:53 PM Title: Prelude
awesome first chapter. your prose flow is decent. french and english aren't that different, although english is more inelegant due to its kludgy lack of inflection... but I digress.
I'm wondering about sensor nets like Miranda Jones had. Any reason Spock couldn't use one of those? He's got to hate bumping into people.
I wonder how his efficiency would be impacted by switching visual input to audio. And Uhura telling him she didn't need his help... that's heartbreaking.
Date: 05/03/2010 5:19 AM Title: Prelude
w00t!! An update, wahoo, moar fun 4 meh!!! This is a fascinating read, and a very interesting set of new aliens as well. Glad to see ye are continuing this -- I know it can be a real bugger sometimes, when the characters simply will not do what you want.
So. As for language, spelling etc -- still some booboos but it looks like you fixed a lot of them.
Greywolf, awaiting more with interest indeed!
Date: 10/24/2009 7:11 AM Title: Prelude
Hello -- any chance of more being posted soon? I'z curious to see wot happens Next!!
OMG! Yes I have to post another chapter to this. I have it, just not completed and spell-checked over. This fic is HUUUUUGE. I actually created a whole time-charter and character charter for it.
My job has been on strike recently which is why I'm side-tracked right now.
Date: 08/29/2009 6:35 AM Title: Prelude
This is quite original take on the matter. I wonder how Spock will fare in the future, because right now I still can't imagine him being an asset on, e.g. an away mission or in any type of direct danger. And I'm curious how his body will cope with the lack of sight. You certainly have me interested. :)