Date: 01/05/2013 5:58 PM Title: Over the Edge
Spock has been a sneaky bastard for too long. I have three responses: call 911, call 911, call 911.
Enjoying this story a lot, even if I disagree with you on some things. For example, McCoy is not a pediatric doctor, but if he were an intern on rotation and Jim were the first case of child abuse he ran into, that would explain his extreme interest in the case. Also, I never passed long notes like that in school--used shorthand--would have been caught otherwise. But I'm really enjoying the relationships between Jim and his friends and many of the details of Jim's life really ring true with people I knew who grew up in abusive households. Jim's emotional journey is truly fascinating. And I also like the way you portray Spock's limitations.
Also, Spock's behavior could TOTALLY come off as child molestor grooming a victim. Obviously he's not, and Jim's mother is too neglectful to intervene. In this case he's exactly what he appears to be, a caring adult. But I do find it kind of amusing.
Thank you for such a well thought out review! :) lol, the child molester thing has been pointed out by several people. I was too close to the story when I wrote it to see it, if you know what I mean, but when I reread the story earlier this week I saw it. I edited the versions on ff.net and Ao3 to try and correct it, but I haven't gotten around to editing the version on this site. No major changes, just tweaking to make him more in character and less weird. Yeah, I'm not too knowledgable about the internship phase, and I was homeschooled, so yeah, you're probably right. Glad I got the emotions right though - never been around abused kids much so it was me guessing and trying to put myself in his shoes. So glad you like it!
Date: 02/06/2011 5:48 AM Title: Chapter 10
oh boyy, I want to punch Finnegan in the face now... I think injuring him would put Jimmy into more trouble, so I am glad it didnt come into that.
It is interesting how the lack of communication is already causing a misunderstanding.
Thanks for updating!
Date: 02/03/2011 9:47 PM Title: Chapter 9
omg, I think this is one of the sweetest scenes you have painted for us. Thank you.
Winona is rising my red flags, though. Hey, just because one is paranoid, it doesnt mean there is no one out to hunt!
Thank you. I enjoyed this read and it kept me warm.