Date: 11/30/2012 3:09 PM Title: Chapter 4
I just reread this story - I've forgotten how many times I've done it - and I really enjoy it. (I hope that Kyle decided that "water from recyc" actually meant "water that was waiting to be processed in the dirty tanks" as opposed to water that was ready to drink. They'd never get the rid of the odor. Or the loss of face for the commanders involved.)
Date: 11/28/2011 3:14 AM Title: Chapter 4
Wow! What a great story and a great concept! I'm really looking fwd to where you're going to take this :) psi null Kirk is awesome enough, telepath!Kirk = exciting/awesome :D
Where did you find the prompt? I thought the st-xi-kink lj comm was dead?
Looking for to your next update! Please post soon :)
Date: 11/27/2011 10:35 PM Title: Chapter 4
I'm interested. Your Jim Kirk is equal parts cocky and sensitive. He takes out a Klingon ship and yet mourns their loss. He pushes where it gives but doesn't go overboard. It's a delicate balance and I'm thrilled to see you toeing the line with him. I'm sorry his brainwaves are screwing with the ship. That's gotta suck. It would be handy for a kind-hearted Vulcan to step in and do some hands-on assistance.... You're doing great, please give us more!
Date: 11/11/2011 4:49 PM Title: Chapter 3
I just found this story - it's *riveting*! There are so many delightful aspects:
Chapter 1 (side thought) I'm pitying the poor people who didn't know they were telepathic - all they know is that they are convinced that SOMETHING is trapped. I keep seeing these poor people frozen mid-step, too terrified to move at all. Imagine Waking Up in the middle of the night really believing that there is a monster under the bed...
2) Perhaps someone should mention the difference between a sending telepath and a receiving one? Spock identified Jim as a "transieving" 'path, but is Spock actually qualified to make that call?
3) Chapter 2; The political maneuvorings were beautifully described. You used just enough bite to make me feel Jim irritated frustration.
4) That combat scene really grabbed me - short though it was.
Great stuff so far: This one goes in my favorites.
Date: 11/05/2011 4:52 PM Title: Chapter 3
Oh great, you're back! I had almost given up on the story, but having lost a computer recently myself, I understand that particular disaster. I was a little confused so I re-read the first two chapters and I'm back up to speed. The headaches are the telepathic power, right? He's going to do something here soon. I can't wait! You've got the tension built up and the excitement raised, I'm excited to see where this goes next! Great job!
Date: 11/04/2011 6:59 AM Title: Chapter 1
He yelped as the catheter was removed – damn, he hated those things – and was relieved that the nasty business was over by the time Spock arrived. None of his fantasies about Spock had been quite that medical, or that undignified.
So no urethral sound fetish for Kirkboy, then?
Date: 04/21/2011 12:49 AM Title: Chapter 2
Oh wow. I read the first chapter and I thought it was wonderful but then I forgot to save it! Bad ForgottenOne! So I read this chapter, and it's just getting better and better. It's incredible that everything just picks up where it left off except by the way, could you report in triplicate on your newfound power? Bureaucracy. And half the ship thinks he can read their minds now. Great. Poor Jim! Spock's right though; protests won't be heard or believed. So he's got all this going on, a headache still, and a Red Alert?? Wow! This is going great, keep up the truly awesome work!
Date: 04/18/2011 7:02 AM Title: Chapter 1
woo, interesting beginning! it should say WIP instead of fiction but hey, other'n that is cool!
moar pls! the one dread of WIP's is whether authors will abandon them or keep going... for me I'd like to see more of this one!
Have no fear, my dear sir, I always finish. Though I understand protestations of innocence are rarely believed.