Date: 11/22/2019 6:02 AM Title: Chapter 2
So into second chapter, nadvMcCoy continues to be an inept Loser. First,meh is totally disrespectful to Spock, second, he breaks Kirk's Confidence over their private talk, 3rd, he does a terrible job checking out Spock! Oh....just go rest...call me tomorrow....Huh? Duh, best medical equipment is aboard those Starships....Kirk sends his First Officer off duty, down for a work up, and McCoy spends like 3 minutes with the Vulcan? Hello....time to revoke Bones' Medical License!
Date: 11/22/2019 5:43 AM Title: Chapter 1
Wait a minute, I just started your story.....on the identifying info for your story, you indicated this is for the Original Star Trek Universe....but judging on how you have McCoy talking in the Gym scene.....no way!
first.....Kirk would not allow McCoy to even brooch the subject of Spock and himself either Professionally or Personally in front of any other Crew ?Member due to the Sepeartion of Command and ?Crew, because of Respect, .authority, Privacy.....certainly not the Roddenberry Kirk. Now maybe the Abrams' Kirk would....per most .fanfic stories, that Kirk seems to be a flippant Twit. Second....while the Original McCoy has his moments of complaining aboutSpock, he never said the things you have written....again, not the Roddenberry
McCoy. sounds more like the Abrams' Universe McCoy. And what is with McCoy deliberately making trouble for Spock, telling Kirk to Order the Vulcan to talk, is the Doctor jealous?
Date: 04/02/2013 12:07 PM Title: Chapter 1
Wow what a journey, or rather journies!
I want to know whether Kirk was ever able to reconcile with Bones, and whether Bones' eyes will be opened to see the depth and truth of Spock's feelings for the Captain...
Date: 11/16/2011 7:52 PM Title: Chapter 1
Oh, this is quite interesting - I wonder what could be wrong with Spock. Ill, possessed by an alien force... hmm. I must say that McCoy seems somewhat overly manipulative and aggressive - perhaps he's jealous or something...
Wow...um....are you psychic? Or reading this on dA? Because at this point WE didn't even know McCoy was jealous.....That doesn't come up until like part ten of the second ending!