Date: 06/26/2012 3:49 PM Title: Numb (Beta)
sagt die Liebe? XD
At risk of sounding awfully patronising, it makes SUCH a difference when you actually bother to write in proper English and present your work nicely, so well done! You obviously have talent and a particularly strong line in angst... This is a really sad piece - it would even be gut-wrenching if I were in the right mood! What is especially good is some of the imagery that you use - you are obviously very imaginative. I'm hoping for more in this vein!
By the way, you do mean 'in vain' and not 'in vein' in your bit! XD