Date: 03/19/2013 10:17 PM Title: Chapter 3 Catch the wind
Oh mercy. This was ... descriptive? Is that a good enough word? Mesmorizing? Thrilling? Enticing? Breathtaking. Yes. You seemed to have captured Jim and Spock's union so well, that feeling of something being missing when one's not around and the intelligent yet innocently naive nature of Jim's mind. I loved it for one. Thank you so much!
Thank you for a lovely review, I am glad it brought you pleasure.
Date: 03/19/2013 9:54 AM Title: Chapter 3 Catch the wind
Adored this very much. Excellent description of the surroundings, and what they are feeling for each other, not to mention the hot sex...And the ending, I always wonder why we choose certain titles, and you made full circle, by ending it with this...
"to feel you all around me, and to take your hand, along the sand, ah but I may as well try to catch the wind" he smiled, for he had caught the wind.
Thank you for a lovely review.
Date: 03/18/2013 7:26 PM Title: Chapter 2 To take your hand along the sand
one of my favorite lines ever and I can see Spock being this sassy:
"Please close your mouth Captain, you look as if you are either trying to catch small insects or to audition for the position of village idiot - and as there is as yet no village on Penthesilea, I do not believe there to be a vacancy."
My only quibble with this joyful romp is that I really don't see Spock using the word "fuck". But if he ever had cause to, i imagine that moment would have been it. Great job!
Thank you, the last chapter is being checked by my beta and I cannot wait to post it. I agree we out the f word but then I think sometimes he is pushed beyond endurance! I have it in mind that really new ensigns teach hI'm rude words and slightly miss worded aphorismas for a laugh.
Date: 03/15/2013 9:27 AM Title: Chapter 1 In the chilly hours and minutes
I thought it was finished as well. We all make mistakes. This story is very well written, and just grabs you, wanting to know what will happen next..Update when you can... Great job.
I am working on the ending. My friend and Beta wightspirit laid a bit of a challenge for the end which is vexing me.
Date: 03/15/2013 5:29 AM Title: Chapter 1 In the chilly hours and minutes
I was unpleasantly surprised to find that despite being labeled as finished this is still a WIP. I have fairly major memory issues and try very hard not to read WIPs as I cannot make a fair comment of any sort on just one part of an unfinished story. I would ask very sincerely of you to fix the description, if you would be so kind. In return, when you *do* finish, it would be my honour to post a review. *doffs his hat* I mean no offense by this, and hope that you take none from it.
Absolutely not, I thought I had labelled it wip but clearly I messed up. I will amend and would be honoured to receive a review once complete. Thank you for pointing out my error.