Date: 12/29/2013 2:43 AM Title: Chapter 1
Such a beautiful story and had me crying as Jim was dying and asking Spock to come with him. Then he was gone, and I could just feel Spock break in half wishing he probably had went with him. Then to find Jim once again but not his and set him on his path to his destiny with his Spock and to see that they have a child and wish for more was so bitter sweet thinking that Jim Prime wished that they would have had a child too, but was too late for them. I wonder though if Spock Prime is alive in your universe and wonder how he would have felt at this news.
Date: 12/27/2013 7:00 AM Title: Chapter 1
So beautiful, your writing: Both were broken open like thin eggshells for the other to see and feel the glistening yolk of their being. Each was both a spotlight and a dark place worthy of the most thorough of explorations.
Really digging what you did with this story & the way you rewrote 'canon'.
Date: 12/27/2013 5:49 AM Title: Chapter 1
Beautiful writing, as Dunyazad has said. Exquisite turns of phrase. And heart-wrenching vignettes. Thankyou. I hope that when the time came for Kirk to die, this Spock went with him into that dark night.
I've only given you a 9 because I wished the story would go on!