Date: 07/20/2014 2:23 AM Title: Epilogue: Stranger
I just sat here today and read all 15 chapters thus far and I am loving it so far. I was sorry to see that Aaron was hurt but just knew it was coming, I had only hoped that Jim would have been able to let him down easy and not having him find out the way he did. I can understand he heartbreak and the jealousy and now you have him find the one person in the whole universe that you hope would just cease to exist. I suppose that now having Khan in the story now is going to make things really interesting and with Spock thinking about going to Gol, I just hope that Jim will find out and go and stop him. Well enough of my rambling for now and I hope you will be updating you story very soon.
Date: 05/23/2014 6:08 PM Title: Chapter 13: Finals
Wondering how the Federation could know enough about Romulan history to have a course in it, seeing as how they had just encountered the Romulans in Balance of Terror. But, I think you are purposefully compressing the TOS timeline, and that's fine.
Date: 05/23/2014 5:58 PM Title: Chapter 11: New Year's Day
You have packed a lot of drama into a short chapter, but it feels very natural, not forced at all. Fascinating take on Edith and Miramanee. Now that I am (finally!) beginning to understand that you are introducing characters we met along the way in TOS at this early stage of their careers, I am looking forward to seeing whom they will meet next.
Date: 05/23/2014 5:26 PM Title: Chapter 6: Attack on S.A. Tower
At first I thought this was a simulated attack, a trainign exercise. Wondering why Romulans would appesr from nowhere and attack the Academy, unless it was part of an all-out attack on Earth, in which case this would be a longer story. :-)
Date: 05/23/2014 5:13 PM Title: Chapter 3
Aww, sweet. I had never thought about Kirk's not being of legal age before, but it is true that according to the Writers' Guide he started at the Academy at the age of 17. Intersting idea that one still has to be 18 to drink in the 23rd century.
Date: 05/23/2014 5:09 PM Title: Chapter 2
Nice, the way you introduce so many TOS characters. Wondering why Stonn is on Earth -- is he at the Academy? Also wondering where Kirk knew Gary from, since it seems early in the year for them to already have gotten together as lovers at the Academy. Did they know each other from before?