Date: 01/04/2016 6:15 AM Title: Concession
Why have you written the entire story in present tense descriptive mode? It is very tiresome to read.
Also, so much passive voice, verb confusion, sentence fragmentations and run-ons, spelling faux pas, inadvertent invention on new words by converting nouns to verb forms (for example, chasming).
And the story has almost no beginning. It has no middle and it has no end. It simply is. As a disembodied segment of a larger piece extracted and placed here. In no way a story in its own right.
Very bad writing.
Date: 03/01/2010 7:44 AM Title: Concession
Oh wow, this is wonderful and kind of dark. I like masochist!Kirk.
Date: 12/23/2007 1:54 PM Title: Concession
I loved this. Great S/m story. I did wonder if Spock will learn to give Kirk bruises that aren't so obvious over time (eg, McCoy has to know at this point). However, I enjoyed the rawness. What I especially liked is that you managed to write a story where Kirk isn't topping from the bottom, so to speak. He's a manipulative little fucker--tends to do that a lot in stories. Somebody has to put him in his place. Good show.