Date: 06/22/2009 7:20 AM Title: Chapter 1
Some interesting insights here. Needs formatting, paragraph breaks, so on -- but you've got some good bones in this thing. Part 2 doesn't seem to be here yet, so I'll check again later. For a first try you're off to a decent start, I'm curious to read what happens next!
Greywolf, remembering his own first fics
Thanks a million, have formatted somewhat now, and will undoubtedly rehash again rather than flesh out part 2 which is floating around in my head but refuses to appear on paper